my personal god
if I have one
must be a water spirit
templed
in blood
so this sitting
on the stone bank
body in water
quietly rocked
by currents
should be
prayer
but silent
& floating
raised in splashes
to a nameless god
a scaled god
shaped by wind
across water
so big, this god
he inspires new tales
of prophet-swallowing fish
living inside
that light, there,
flashing within ripples
& laughing
Susan Daniels Poetry 
very nice well constructed and thought out
Thank you, Ian. Had loads of help on this from my creek 🙂
Very lovely, nature is always inspiring…it’s difficult for me to comprehend people who seem to have no relationship, at all, with the natural world and look at it only as an inconvenience or a problem to be solved..so sad..
Thanks so much, Leo!
Yes, I can see that. I agree.
Thank you, George 🙂
Yes, a water god, of sorts.
Interesting poem. A person;’s Chi is more or less the same with that person in terms of attributes. The Chi goes beyond however in that the Chi is god, destiny, fate, guardian angel and force vital, determiner of life’s chances all at the same time. If one is a poet,, one’s Chi is poet. If one likes water, one Chi likes water.
Ah–had I known all that, I would not have used that as a title, and something else instead. Seems what I have here has to do with nature, within and without one’s body, more than anything. Help with a title would be very much appreciated here, partner of duets…
Never tamper with a finished work of art! It is beautiful as is.
OK, point taken 🙂
And thanks!
I like the small “g” god.
Thank much 😉
You had me right there with you. Loved the lines –
raised in splashes
to a nameless god
Thanks, Danny.
living inside
that light, there,
flashing within ripples
& laughing…. sounds both..peaceful and cheerful to me…i like
Thank you, Claudia 🙂
You know, I was almost a little surprised you referred to God as “he.” The reason is that I find such power in the feminine themes and images you use that I could see a being of such grand power being an extension of the feminine “principle” (if that is the right word) that often comes through in your work.
I really like the last two stanzas, especially the way I almost see this God being the whale, being a figure like Jonah and being the consciousness of both of them together (and the water they swim inside).
Jeremy, I never even thought of that. Please check my feminist pulse–is it still there? I think of God as having properties of both male and female–wonder why I did that?
Nothing wrong about that at all. I don’t think God needs to be one or the other, I was just struck by it.
Know what you mean–I am surprised, too–did not notice!
You created a new buddha!
K, thanks. He lives in my creek, if you would like to meet him; although perhaps he is in water everywhere–smiling
Btw, anything I can call you besides K?
GP or just Ken 🙂
Works–I have so many “K’s” I want to be able to distinguish you 🙂
I see 🙂
I could expound but succinctly ~this is a sweet spirit of inward praising the eye sees alll around ! Glorious !
thanks!
love it !! first stanza is my fave:))
Thanks, Don–mine too–hard to keep up with that one.
Reminds me of times spent in the White River in Vermont, back upon a bed of gravel, six inches of water rushing to either side, some spillage skimming over, cooling me down. Tranquillity, that, a moment one hopes can elongate and stretch time.
Yes, exactly that kind of moment.
Actually Susan, in Ghana, the ethnic Gas, (one of the tribes, hate using this word) refer to God as having both male and female attributes. A great poem, as always, ‘Water goddess’.
Thanks, my friend. That is fascinating–and way ahead of us in our perception of God (with the big G).
I wonder where this idea of JHVH as being male while it makes sense that the divine being is both and beyond. For some reason, your poem made me think of Poseidon, the greek god who reigns over waters.
Nice poem!
Agree with you re the gender of God being something beyond us, and both. know what–I liked Poseidon (was passionate about Greek mythology as a kid), and if he wants to play in my creek instead of the ocean, I am all for it. And thanks for liking this!